Full name
Company name,
Company Address
PC, city
My survey on job search, pushes me to offer my candidature.
I have no diploma, and it is with pleasure that I shall any function in your company.
My great qualities as my relationships, I seriously mean that I am fit for any office. With no driver's license, I am limited in my travels and my work schedules.
Sure you find me some spots to do, I will present myself to meet you tomorrow at 14h. Greetings.
The above example is a bit forced, but it helps to explain the reasons why it is not good.
On the merits: it lacks the information (address, phone number or email) of the applicant.
No details are provided on the contact person, the director, human resources manager or other.
There is no title, is a lack of courtesy and respect.
No details are given on the fact that it is a response to an advertisement or an unsolicited application.
The text contains spelling errors (words in bold) and punctuation (no space before a period or comma, only after).
The tone is negative (no driver's license, therefore, limited to travel and at the times), this kind of problem is not to put in the letter, but to discuss in an interview.
The tone is arrogant "my great qualities" and maintenance is determined by the applicant, then it must be available to the recruiter for the day and time.
The tone is also too familiar "Certainly you will find me some spots to do" is the recruiter who decides.
As a formula to end the letter, there is the word "Greetings", which always show a lack of respect and etiquette, it is for a person who has responsibilities in the society, see the leader.
Finally the letter is not signed, it is essential to avoid an oversight, it does not at all serious and professional.
Sunday, 8 January 2012
A bad example of motivation letter
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